Hey bloggers,👋 Whilst we were in lockdown,🏠 our teacher, Mr Wikaira, sent us💬 a list to do from our Saturday recount. Here is mine.👇 Hope you enjoy it.😀👍
Hi Mariam, Good job. I love the way you presented this piece, lovely background and unusual font attracts the eye so you can't do anything else but read it. You also have a good amount of adjectives in your writing to keep it interest. Maybe next time you could add a bit of feeling into the writing, do you like school work, what's your favourite subject, did you enjoy watching videos. Looking forward to your next piece.
Hi Mariam
ReplyDeleteI like your recount. I like how you used time words and a variety of sentence starters. It makes it a bit more interesting.
Did you have a goal for this piece writing? What videos did you watch on YouTube? Did you have a good day?
Happy blogging
Hi Mariam,
ReplyDeleteGood job. I love the way you presented this piece, lovely background and unusual font attracts the eye so you can't do anything else but read it.
You also have a good amount of adjectives in your writing to keep it interest. Maybe next time you could add a bit of feeling into the writing, do you like school work, what's your favourite subject, did you enjoy watching videos.
Looking forward to your next piece.