Kia ora Mariam. What a great description. I like the way you've used different senses. What do you think you could hear there? This reminds me of the waterfall in Goldie Bush which is near me in Muriwai. I wonder if you could do a piece of writing like this where people have to guess what you are describing?
Yes, I do sometimes see other peoples blog posts, and wonder what they could do better, for example, instead of using the word "happy", they could use delighted, or joyful. That's all I have to say for now. Bye!
Kia ora Mariam. What a great description. I like the way you've used different senses. What do you think you could hear there? This reminds me of the waterfall in Goldie Bush which is near me in Muriwai. I wonder if you could do a piece of writing like this where people have to guess what you are describing?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Mariam,
ReplyDeleteWhat an excellent piece of writing! My favourite line " pushing you a thousand miles away".
Phil has a great idea! Have you got any tips for people looking to improve their writing?
Looking forward to seeing future blog post,
Miss Laxa
Kia Ora Ms Laxa, and Phil,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind and interesting comment.
Yes, I do sometimes see other peoples blog posts, and wonder what they could do better, for example, instead of using the word "happy", they could use delighted, or joyful. That's all I have to say for now. Bye!
Mariam